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Year 2: Day 37 – Credibility, Kids

“Why you hack-and-slashin’ our work?”
they ask,
like I get something out of it,
tearin’ ’em down;
they don’t think
that I’m buildin’ ’em up.

Better they get the red ink now.

“But why can’t you let us
make stupid mistakes
while we’re kids
that we’ll fix
when we’re grown?”

‘Cause it’s about credibility, kids.

“When you’re grown
you can’t afford
to make those mistakes
if you want anybody
to listen.

If you don’t wanna be
laughed right outta town
and all of your passion
to die,
better learn
to say it right.

Because nobody
will give you
the time of day
if you can’t
make yourself

And nobody’s
going to be
waitin’ around
to give you
the red ink
like I will.”


4 thoughts on “Year 2: Day 37 – Credibility, Kids

  1. Yes there is a need for criticism in our early stage of life as long as it is done to teach the importance of self preservation as I believe you are talking about. When I was in Journalism school I use to hate going to the editor, but now that Im much older I still catch myself marking my paper in the same exact style as my teacher use to do. Many great lessons taught by the stroke of those red pens!

  2. If your Kids are old enough tell them this one.


    Critiques are not to stroke ones ego like a phallus.
    Nor are they to be said in anger or malice.
    If ones structure points to a technique.
    Then that’s what must be pointed out in critiques.

    Whether Waka, Tie or Haiku.
    Only the rules in these will do.
    Not every one will like what you write.
    So don’t consider critiques a slight.

    If you don’t understand what I say
    To this next part, attention do pay.
    Perfect in structure shape and form.
    For Tie poetry this is the norm.

    Tie Poetry

    Tie poetry has three very strict rules.
    1. Every word must be one on or syllable.
    2. Only two lines in the poem.
    3. Only three words in a line.
    With that in mind this is a poem.

    Up your but.
    You numb nut.

    Josehf Lloyd Murchison

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